Developing countries require international organization’s help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, there are still many developing countries in the world. Some of them cannot afford clean water and enough food, their citizens can only survive
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drinking dust water or eating
leafs
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.
Therefore
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, a suggestion of providing them
finanical
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financial
aid
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was proposed. Advocates claim that providing them money is a possible way to let them develop their society and
fulfill
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their needs,
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food from
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countries or
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profressional
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professionals
to complete their farming system.
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, opponents
critize
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criticise
that offering them practical
aid
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is a better way to solve their requirement completely,
finanical
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financial
support will not
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last
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,
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and encourage
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encourage
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encouraging
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their
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them
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to create their own money
of
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providing practical support will be
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possible way.
Campared
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Compared
with both
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arguement
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arguments
, I prefer practical
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more than
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financial
aid
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.

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language use
Many sentences are long and have errors. Use shorter lines to be clear.
structure
Make a clear plan. Use one paragraph for your view, and one for each side.
grammar
Fix spelling mistakes like finacial (financial), leaves, compared, argument, and professional.
content
Give one or two simple examples to back each point.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go together, like first, then, also, but, so, finally.
content
It tries to cover both sides and give a view.
structure
The topic is clear and the idea of aid is seen.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial aid
  • immediate relief
  • development projects
  • infrastructure
  • economic growth
  • loans
  • grants
  • budget deficits
  • public sector
  • dependency
  • practical aid
  • self-reliance
  • skill development
  • training programs
  • knowledge transfer
  • local capacities
  • technical assistance
  • long-term development
  • best practices
  • innovations
  • expert advice
  • effective policies
  • transformation
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