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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world, while others believe that scientists are more influential. Discuss both sides of view and give your opinion.

It has been argued
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 that
politicians
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 are huge
inflencer
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influencers
 in the
world
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,
while
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 others
thinks
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think
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 that
scientists
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 have the most influence.
This
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 essay will examine both views and will give my vision. In
this
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 contemporary
world
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,
which
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where
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 most
of
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politicians
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 play
celebrities'
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celebrity'
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 roles
instead
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 of focusing on their leadership, it may not be
inflential
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influential
 the same for all regions. To give an illustration, we are
witness
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of
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 what's happening in the
world
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; leaders act as role
mode
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 to show off the power and position in many countries.
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,
this
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 immature
leardership
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leadership
 influenced badly but not in a good way.
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, there are countries
that
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the
politicians
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 don't care about
public's
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the public's
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 benefit and make decisions on purpose of their own
prophet
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profit
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.
In contrast
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,
scientists
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which
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who
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 work not only for the specific nations'
prophet
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prosperity
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, but their activities are worldwidely and for the
benifits
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benefit
 of humanity and our planet.
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, they are mostly unknown, but they are
inflential
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influential
 for all the
world
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not
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, not
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 only the region they are working in.
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, during
covid-19
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COVID-19
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, it was the
scientists
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,
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 who made the vaccines for people all around the
world
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 without considering people's nationality.
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, the pandemic was prevented soon and saved millions of lives from death and poverty. In conclusion,
as
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 my opinion,
scientists
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 are more
inflential
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influential
 to
all
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the
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world
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whole world
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 and creatures rather than
politicians
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.
Forethermore
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Furthermore
, policy is mostly based
benifit
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benefit
 of a particular area,
while
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 knowledge and the
innoventions
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innovations
 of
scientists
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are belongs
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 to
all
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the
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world
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whole world
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.

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grammar
Fix many grammar and word form errors to be clear. Use simple, short sentences.
structure
Plan your essay: intro, two body paragraphs, then a short conclusion. Use clear linking words.
content
State your view early and keep it in the end too. Keep to one main idea per paragraph.
content
Give more clear examples that relate to the point. The Covid vaccine example is a good start.
vocabulary
Use only small set of common words. Do not use hard words.
content
Good idea to discuss both sides and give a view.
structure
Has a clear end point.
content
Uses some real-world examples.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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