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The diagram below shows a fire exit plan in a college

The diagram below shows a fire exit plan in a college
The layout illustrates the fire exit route in a college dormitory.
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, the college accommodation houses 7 bedrooms, a lift and two stairs which are adjacent to the emergency exits. The complex of the college accommodation shows seven bedrooms, a corridor, and two staircases, with one of them located at the western end of the building and the other adjacent to the lift in the central part of the building. When a fire incident happens,
students
Use synonyms
 of 1,2 and 3
bedroom
Fix the agreement mistake
bedrooms
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 should use
western
Correct article usage
the western
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 staircase to exit the building
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 they gather at point 1.
In contrast
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, residents of the 4th and 5th bedroom have direct access to the northern staircase,
whereas
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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7 and 8 bedroom
students
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 should cross through the corridor to reach the meeting point 2
where
Punctuation problem
, where
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 all
students
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 of
eastern
Correct article usage
the eastern
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 side
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students
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apply
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meet up.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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