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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be taken as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, many people are of the opinion that studying through the internet has
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 appeal,
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 some believe that offline classes are more advantageous compared to online ones. I firmly disagree that traditional
education
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 is more effective because online
education
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 provides greater flexibility and
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 for learners. The first reason why I disagree is that online
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courses
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 level of flexibility that traditional learning cannot offer. Students are
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 their level of knowledge and
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study at their own pace and schedule
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 allows them to balance their studies with
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 or personal responsibilities.
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, many professionals now take online master's programs,
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 jobs.
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 receive educational opportunities without destroying their careers. The second reason why I disagree
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 online learning has become increasingly
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 and interactive owing to technological advancements in
education
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. Modern platforms use video lectures, live discussions and virtual group projects, which probably simulate real-life
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 classroom experience.
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, several platforms allow learners to collaborate on projects and receive instant feedback from teachers.
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, online courses not only develop communication skills,
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, make quality
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 accessible to everyone with an internet connection. In conclusion,
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content
Your essay argues for online learning, but it should also note good points of traditional study. Add a brief counter view and then explain why you still disagree.
structure
Be clear in the introduction about your stance. A simple line like 'I think online study is better because ...' helps.
grammar
Use short, plain sentences. Many long sentences mix ideas in a hard way.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, for example.
examples
Give concrete and simple examples. Write who, where, or when if you can.
structure
Clear stance stated in the introduction.
content
Two main reasons are given to support the view.
cohesion
Signposting phrases like 'The first reason' and 'For instance' are used.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distance learning
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • innovative technologies
  • digital tools
  • self-paced learning
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • motivation
  • direct engagement
  • soft skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • networking
  • direct support
  • feedback
  • understanding
  • retention
  • traditional classroom
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