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The line graph compares the number of goods transported to the UK by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in million of tonnes.

The line graph compares the number of goods transported to the UK by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in million of tonnes.
The line chart provides key information about the way of items transported in the United Kingdom by
road
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,
water
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, rail, and pipeline from 1974 to 2002. The units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
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road
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the road
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 and
water
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 use of products transported increased significantly over the entire time
period
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.
In addition
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, railway decreased gradually,
whereas
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 pipeline remained relatively stable.
According to
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 what is shown,
road
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 transport was the biggest way in 1974 with just below 80
million
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 tonnes, and consistently increased every year to around 100
million
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 tonnes in 2002. Pipeline's transported was the lowest
overall
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 user at the start of the
period
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, at around 10
million
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, and hovered between approximately 20 and 30
million
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 throughout the entire
period
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. In terms of
water
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 and rail, the
water
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 method across ships started just under 40
million
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, but steadily increased to just over 50
million
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 over the next 10 years, before staying at the same level for years after peaking in 2002 at approximately 60
.
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million.
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Railroads'
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Railroads'
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road
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's use began the recorded
period
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 with around 40
million
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, and
this
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 consistently dropped year on year to just below 30
million
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 in 1986.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, water, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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