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Some believe students should learn international news as a subject at school, while others think it’s a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.*

International News is considered to be the most credible and
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 reason, many individuals argue that every high
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 pupil should learn that as a
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 in their
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 others believe it is a waste of time. Both
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views will be discussed before presenting my own opinion. On the one hand, several people believe that it must be made strict that every pupil should have the knowledge of international news by learning as a
subject
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 in their
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, because
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 type of
subject
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 helps to enhance their basic learning and their perspective of thinking.
Moreover
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, these subjects help a student to learn multicultural knowledge, which is a very effective tool in the global job market.
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, if a person has a command of foreign languages,
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 there would be more chances of job opportunities.
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, some people think it is a waste of time considering it as an extra burden on a scholar to learn a new
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, which would
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 lead to some difficulties in the pupil's life.like they get anxiety,stress
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due to
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 unawareness of the international curriculum system .
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, in Karnataka state, the government of Karnataka introduced
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 compulsory Kannada
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 syllabus , but later the results were worse and it was removed from the syllabus. In conclusion, inclusion of international news as a
subject
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 has many benefits in students' lives, but care should be taken to maintain the difficulty level of the subjects, so that every learner can benefit from that
subject
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task response
State your clear view in the first or last line and give strong reasons for it. Add clear proof for each point and use less hard words.
structure
Make each paragraph hold one big idea. Start with a clear sentence, then add 2 lines to prove it, and finish with a tie to the next idea.
purpose
You show both sides and give your view in the end.
coherence
You use a connect word like 'On the one hand' to link ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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