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Writing Samples
Band 1

The illustration shows fire exits in college accomodation with 7 bedrooms.

The photo shows
university
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a university
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,
there
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where
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were
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they were
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 planning
fire
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a fire
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 exit plan for students who live in
accommodation
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an accommodation
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 with 7 bedrooms
which
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, which
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 merged with
hall
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the hall
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.
Overall
Linking Words
,
in
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on
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current
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the current
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 campus were two meeting points connected with stairs from the inside. In the case of fire, bedroom 1, 2 in
northern
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the northern
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and
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part and
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3
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bedroom 3
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in
southern
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the southern
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should
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part should
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 leave the building through meeting
point
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 1, because it's
the
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apply
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the quickest and closest exit to secure themselves. For bedroom 4, 5 in eastern with an elevator and 6, 7 below, are located closer to meeting
point
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 2, they should better go through Meeting
point
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 2 because it's the fastest
point
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 to get themselves there safe and sound.

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task response
Add a short intro to say what you write about and what plan you show. Then end with a small closing line.
coherence
Put ideas in a clear order. Start with the plan, then say what to do in a fire. Use two or three main parts.
language
Use easy words and fix word order. Watch for small grammar mistakes and use simple sentences.
accuracy
Put full stops at ends. Use commas when you list things and make sure sentences are easy to read.
content
You show which rooms go to which meeting point.
structure
You note two meeting points and how fast to reach them.
clarity
You give numbers for rooms and exits.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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