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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
This
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 line graph compares four different materials of recycling - paper and cardboard, glass containers,
aluminium
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 cans and
plastics
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 from 1982 to 2010
Overall
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, the four materials followed noticeably different trends over the period. Paper and cardboard rose with some fluctuations, glass containers experienced a fall ,
then
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 followed a small increase,
aluminium
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 cans continued to increase without stopping , and
plastics
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 showed steady growth in some periods. Paper and cardboard began at about 65 per
cent
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 in 1982 and increased to a peak of 80 per
cent
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 in 1994, before falling to 70 per
cent
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 in 2010. Glass containers started with 50 per
cent
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 in 1982, but
this
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 figure dropped dramatically to roughly 40 per
cent
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 by 1990. From
then
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 on, the recycling rate climbed steadily, reaching 60 per
cent
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 in 2010 There were no recycling programs until 1986 and 1990 for
aluminium
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 cans and
plastics
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, respectively. Starting at around 5 per
cent
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 in 1986,
aluminium
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 can recycling experienced
rapid
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a rapid
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 increase to about 45 per
cent
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 in 2010.
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,
plastics
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 increased only slightly , starting from around 2 per
cent
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 in 1990 to just under 10 per
cent
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 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, plastics, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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