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Band 3

Intelligence is the most important quality for a leader. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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 believe that great
lidear
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leaders
 might not have advanced intelligence, but
,
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apply
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i
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I
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 firmly believe
,
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apply
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 that
inteligence
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intelligence
it
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apply
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is the major trait for
that
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those
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person
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 types;
while
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 there are
also
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 some other characteristics without which
individual
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an individual
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 can not
became
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become
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 a
geniune
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genuine
leader
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. It
widely
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is widely
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 known
,
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 that
true
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a true
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leader
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 might have
fusion
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a fusion
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 of many positive human
traits
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.
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such
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ability
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the ability
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 to stay calm in
the
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apply
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stressfull
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stressful
situation
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situations
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, and empathy
to
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for
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 the entire team
with
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are
also
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 vital to the
leader
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 position. And
person
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which
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who
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 has these
traits
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is
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could keep
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leader
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a leadership
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 position without significant intelligence capabilities.
Moreover
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,
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leader
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a leader
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 is the
person
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that
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who
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 can organise teamwork
,
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therefore
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therefore,
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people
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 with
this
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 characteristic are able to manage
people
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 with greater brain capabilities, in order to get
result
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results
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.
However
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,
geniune
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genuine
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leader
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leadership
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 abilities can be
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demonstrated
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 only if
people
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 have developed intelligent knowledge. Leadership contain itself enormous
people
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traits
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, that in connection with each other could give
desireable
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desirable
result
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results
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.
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, the best leaders in the history of humanity were individuals
,
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 who
stands
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stood
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 forward in intellect;
lucid
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a lucid
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 instance
it
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is Adolf Hitler,
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person
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a person
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that
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who
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units
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unites
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people
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 with the same ideas and
have
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has
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 knowledge in distinct spheres, from arts to
politician
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political
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 structures.
Although
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,
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apply
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leader
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leaders
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 do not need
have
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to have
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 only
intellegence
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intelligence
,
he
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they
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 must have a wide variety of required
traits
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 simultaneously.
To sum up
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, to be
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leader
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a leader
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,
individual
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an individual
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 must
to
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accomplish
traits
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, like empathy and resilience,
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also
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apply
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though
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although
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 the most prevalent characteristic is brainpower.

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task response
Take a clear view and keep it in each part of the essay.
coherence
Plan before you write. Use one idea per paragraph.
language
Use simple words and check spell and grammar.
content
The idea of what makes a leader is clear.
cohesion
Some linking words are used, like however and to sum up.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • informed decisions
  • complex problems
  • anticipate
  • emotional intelligence
  • connect with others
  • inspire
  • manage conflicts
  • wisdom
  • integrity
  • execute ideas
  • empathy
  • resilience
  • motivate
  • unite
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