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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

These two maps illustrate how a
harbour
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 has changed since 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that it has changed a lot after redevelopment during 25 years.
To begin
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, some facilities have been relocated.
For example
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, there was a disused Castle in the southeast of the
harbour
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 in 2000, which has been replaced by a hotel.
Similarly
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, the areas which were designated for fishing boats and the Marina (private yachts) have been replaced by each other.
Moreover
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, some recreational activities have been added to the
harbour
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.
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, new showers and toilets have been constructed above the southern car park, and the cafes and shops have been built on the west side of the lifeboat place.
Likewise
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, a new dock has been added to the west side of the
harbour
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.
Although
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 some areas have remained unchanged, like the northern public beach, a road, and the northern showers and toilets, the southern public beach has been converted to a private beach for residents of the hotel.
Apart from
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this
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, the entrance to the southern car park has been moved to the road. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the
harbour
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 has changed significantly over a 25-year period.

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task response
Explain your main ideas in a clear order. Start with an overall view, then list the changes, and end with a simple compare.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas fit together and to guide the reader.
content
Be exact with each change. State what area moved or what was added.
grammar
Watch small grammar and spelling when you can. For example, use 'castle' and 'harbour' consistently.
vocabulary
Use simple and exact words to show contrast and relation between old and new features.
structure
Clear overall view of big changes.
coherence
Good use of linking words in places.
content
Some good examples of changes shown in detail.
Fully explain your ideas

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