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The chart below shows information about the favorite subjects of 60 students from two schools, school A and school B.

The chart below shows information about the favorite subjects of 60 students from two schools, school A and school B.
The presented graph illustrates data about the most liked subjects among 60
students
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 in
school
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school
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B
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Overall
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, there are a number of preferences. The majority of
students
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 enjoying sport and
science
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most
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 is the highest at
school
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 A, yet the lowest at
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B
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While
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 language, craft/drawing
and
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also
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 social
science
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 are the highly preferred courses for learners at
school
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B
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,
but
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apply
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these classes are
favored
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 by few
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 at
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 A. Observing the diagram in detail, social
science
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 is preferred by only six
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 at
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 A
,
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however
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,
this
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 lesson is chosen by 10
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 at
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B
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in
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 contrast,
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science
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the science
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 subject is more popular, with 9
students
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 compared to 2 counterparts at
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B
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Moreover
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, A
little
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small
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amount
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number
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 of learners dislike
language
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the language
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 subject, with only 5
students
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 at
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 A.
On the other hand
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, at
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B
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, 18
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 expressed interest in
this
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 class.
Furthermore
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,
Between
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between
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school
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 A and
B
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 recorded a significant disparity in terms of craft/drawing, with 4 and 36
students
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, school, b, science with synonyms.
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