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Some people think governments should spend money looking for life on other planets, while others believe that there are many unsolved problems on Earth. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that
governments
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 should spend large amounts of money researching for their lives on other planets,
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 others argue that
governments
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 must spend
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 money on
Earth
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 to resolve their problems. I strongly agree that solving
Earth
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's
issues
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 before it is a major priority for life.
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 essay will elucidate both views before concluding. On the one hand,
Earth
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 faced several
issues
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 directly affecting human life. Nowadays, people are experiencing Poverty, climate change, and health care because
governments
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 are not focusing on these
issues
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.
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, individuals who do not have access to clean water are at risk
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 financial circumstances.
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, new youth are facing lots of problems. They have completed their degree but are still waiting for the government to provide them with jobs.
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,
governments
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 should overcome the social
issues
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 and natural disasters that have occurred
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 a lack of maintenance.
On the other hand
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, research brings more space for human beings to live on another planet,
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 scientific findings.
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, some study findings help scientists like those researching Mars. They revealed that on Mars, it is a very clear climate and frozen water.
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, these discoveries are not helpful for
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, climate change, water scarcity, and food insecurity already affect millions of people.
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, invest more money in
Earth
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 rather than exploring space. In conclusion,
Earth
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 is an immediate problem right now must come
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first to solve these
issues
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. Space research is useful, but it is not long-term for solving problems for individuals.
Governments
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 should
prioritize
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 solving the major
issues
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.

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task-response
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and keep it in every part. Say what you think and why.
grammar
Use simple and exact words. Check word order in sentences like 'researching for their lives on other planets'.
coherence
Link ideas with clear steps: first point, next point, then your view. Use easy links like 'but', 'also', 'for example'.
examples
Give exact examples about the topic. Use numbers or real facts when you can.
structure
You use a clear yes/no view and a good map of points.
conclusion
Conclusion restates your main idea and brings closure.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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