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The charts below show the differences in how people in 3 countries learned English in 2010and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the differences in how people in 3 countries learned English in 2010and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the English learning
classes
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 in different forms compared in three countries in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, in the previous year
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, abroad
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abroad
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studies abroad
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studies
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 were not much preferred, and the most popular choice was evening
classes
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. In the current
year
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year,
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 online
studies
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 have significantly increased, and
by contrast
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, evening
classes
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 have slightly dropped. In 2010,
Country
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 C had the largest
amount
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number
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 of evening
classes
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, which was almost the whole percentage.
While
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 the evening
classes
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 were decreased in 2015,
it
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they
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 still
plays
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play
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 a crucial role in these three countries. The remaining groups had a similar percentage of evening
classes
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 in 2010, but
Country
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 B had a dramatic fall compared with
Country
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 A in 2015.
Country
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 C had only two
classes
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 in the previous year
,
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;
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on the other hand
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, abroad
studies
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 appeared in 2015,
although
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it
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they
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 only increased 3%. Online
studies
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 in
Country
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 B had the most changes. It only had 8% in 2010,
then
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 it increased rapidly up to 32% in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, studies, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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