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The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Summarise the differences and comaprisons.

The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Summarise the differences and comaprisons.
The bar chart illustrates the number of vehicle owners per thousand people in China over a four-year period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of owned
cars
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 significantly rose for the given period. In 1987, the least
amount
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number
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 of people owned
the
Correct article usage
a
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 car in China. Only
less
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fewer
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 than 350
cars
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owned
Verb problem
are owned
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 per thousand people. Over the following six years, the total
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number cars
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cars of
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of cars
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 owned by each person gradually increased to 1000
cars
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. The
increasded
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increased
 trend continued

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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