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the first table below shows changes in hte total population of New York city from 1800 to 2000. The second and hrid table show cahnges in the population of the five district of the city (Manhattan, Brookyn, Bronx, Queens. Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the informaiton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the first table below shows changes in hte total population of New York city from 1800 to 2000. The second and hrid table show cahnges in the population of the five district of the city (Manhattan, Brookyn, Bronx, Queens. Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the informaiton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows how the
population
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 of
five
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the five
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 boroughs in New
York
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 City changed between 1800 and 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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 the
population
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 of New
York
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 increased dramatically over the two centuries, with particularly rapid growth during the 19th century. The
population
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 more than quadrupled by 1900. From 1900 to 2000, it more than doubled. In 1800, approximately 6 thousand
people
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 lived in
Manhattan
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 , accounting for around 76% of the total
population
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 in New
York
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. Other districts, including
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Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, and Staten Island
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,
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 had only 18 thousand (24%)
people
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, far fewer than
Manhattan
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. In 1900, the other four districts together represented 46%, almost catching up with
Manhattan
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’s 54%. There were almost the same number of
people
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.
Manhattan
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 was still the biggest city with the most
people
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 in NY , though.
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, in 2000, 81% of the
population
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 in New
York
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 City moved to those four cities,
while
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Manhattan
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's share declined sharply.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, york, people, manhattan with synonyms.
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