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It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

From yesteryears, giving out
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gift
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gifts
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 was traditional and acceptable among most of the community.
However
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,
this
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 trend is fading away as
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 do not value the
things
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,
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apply
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 which is given by their peers
,
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 and family since it's a waste of
money
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. I, for one, largely disagree with
this
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view point
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viewpoint
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due to
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 unconditional affection that brings into the relationships by gifts, and indirectly helping out the
people
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 in need.
This
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eassy
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essay
 will shed
lights
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light
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 on my
stand
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standpoint
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 point followed by relevant examples. The first and foremost one is that folk still
values
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value
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 the
gift
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 given by their
closed
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once
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ones
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.
This
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 is because individuals often show their love through action, and giving out
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gift
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gifts
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 is the best way to depict the affection
,
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 and compassion towards them.
Furthermore
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, handing out
things
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 will not only build stronger relationships among each other, but
also
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gives
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give
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 a sense of self-satisfaction, which comes
by
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from
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 giving out the
things
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 to others.
For example
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,
In
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in
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 India, especially during marriage
ceramonies
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ceremonies
, relatives and colleagues usually
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dish
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 out
grant
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gifts
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 as a ritual, which
symbols
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symbolises
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 unity
,
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apply
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 and trust
into
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in
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 their relationships. Gifts,
therefore
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,
plays
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play
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 an important role
to bid
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in strengthening
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 the bond
stronger
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apply
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.
Moreover
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,
It
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it
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 can be crucial to support the
people
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,
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apply
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 who
is
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are
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 in need. What
i
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I
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 meant by
that is
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, in
the
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a
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 conservative
society
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society,
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people
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 usually do not take
money
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 because of stigma, and sometimes
feels
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feel
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 inferior.
Nevertheless
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, giving
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gift
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a gift
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 can be an alternative to
money
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.
For instance
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, my best friend
rakesh
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Rakesh
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, who was
football
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the football
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caption
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captain
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 in our school.
Nevertheless
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, His soccer cleats had been worn out and he has not yet replaced
it
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them
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 because of
finanical
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financial
issue
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issues
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. So
instead
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giving
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of giving
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money
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, I bought a pair of soccer shoes
to
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for
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 him, which
it
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apply
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meant a lot to him.
Thus
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, providing essential items to the
love
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loved
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 ones who
is
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are in
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 need can be
a
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the
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 best form of assistance an individual can do.
On the other hand
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,
Some
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some
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 dissenting voices claim that
people
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 do not often
values
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value
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gift
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gifts
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 which is
giving
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given
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 by their peers. The reason behind it is the preference of individuals that vary from time to time,
due to
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range
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the range
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 of
choice
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choices
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 available in
modern
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the modern
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 world.
This
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 can
been
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be
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 seen in
millenials
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millennials
, where they
prefers
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prefer
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money
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instead
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 of gifts, since it gives them a sense of independence to buy what they like.
Consequently
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,
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gift
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gifts
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 for them
becomes
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become
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 outdated
due to
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individuals
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individuals'
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 choices.
To conclude
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,
people
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 value
money
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 more than
things
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that
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is
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have
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 been given by their peers.
Nonetheless
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,
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gift
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a gift
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 is a symbol of love and affection which can
show
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be shown
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 through action by handing out to the loved ones.
Therefore
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, I still opine that
people
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 should continue to practice
of
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apply
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dishing out
the
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apply
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gift
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gifts
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 in order to build
strong
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a strong
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 bond
amony
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among
 each other.

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task response
Plan your answer with a clear view at the start. Say if you agree or not and say the 2 or 3 main reasons.
coherence
Make each para hold one main idea. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add a bit of detail.
grammar
Fix the wrong words and bad habits in spelling and grammar. Use short and easy sentences.
examples
Give more real and useful examples that fit the topic.
cohesion
Link ideas with small words like and, but, also, for example, so the talk flows.
idea
You take a clear view and show it with reasons.
example
You give some real life examples to back your point.
analysis
You try to talk about both sides at some points.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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