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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the table below.

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Introduction
his
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His
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 report shows hours of leisure time per year in
someland
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Someland
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.
Body · 1
Watching
TV
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teens
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, teens
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 have 1200
people
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.
Teens
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 watch
TV
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 the most in their spare time.
Teens
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 who watch
TV
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 for
70s
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70 hours
 are the most.
Teens
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 who watch
TV
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 for
30s
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30 minutes
 are the least.
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Cinema
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The cinema
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teens have
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 100
people
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.
Teens
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 go to
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cinema the
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 less
their
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in their
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 spare time.
Teens
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 who go
cinema
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 for 20s and more than 70s are the most.
Teens
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 who go
cinema
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 for 40s and 50s are the least.
Body · 2
Socialising with 4 or
less
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people
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 and Individual
exercise
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people
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 are
same
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the same
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. They both
are
Verb problem
have
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 150
people
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.
Teens
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 who
socialising
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socialise
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 with 4 or
less
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fewer
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people
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 for 30s are the most.
Teens
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 who for 20s are the least.
Teens
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 who Individual
exercise
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 or 30s and 40s are the most.
Teens
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 who Individual
exercise
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 for
50s
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50 minutes
 are the least.
Conclusion
There is a hundred
people
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 difference between socialising with 4 or more
people
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 and group
exercise
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/sport.
Teens
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 who
socialising
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socialise
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 with 4 or more
people
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 and group
exercise
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/sport for 20s are the most.

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Task response
Begin with a short view of the table. Say what the data shows in general.
Coherence and cohesion
Group ideas in parts. Use a small intro and a short end. Use simple linking words.
Language
Be exact with numbers. Use clear words like minutes and people. Do not use vague phrases.
Structure
Give one clear idea per paragraph. Then add the next idea.
Language
Check spelling and grammar to be more clear.
content
There is an effort to use data from the table.
task purpose
The aim to show the take of leisure time is clear.
data
Some numbers are given in the text.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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