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There are more cars on the roads these days and more accidents are happening. As a result, some politicians have suggested that people should take regular driving tests throughout their lives, rather than one single test. What do you think are the advantages of repeat driving tests? Do these outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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recent years, there
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increase
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an increase
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accidents
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accidents,
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leads
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leading
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 the politicians to suggest a
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to reduce
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reduction in
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amount
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number
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accidents
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 they think it is a better
opption
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option
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a
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regularly
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regular
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test
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 throughout their lives
insted
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instead
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test
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opnion
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opinion
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repeted
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repeated
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test
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tests
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 offer
a
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several good advantages that can outweigh the
disadvantsges
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disadvantages
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repeated
test
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 can help to promote a
drivers
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driver's
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 skills, in
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of
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test
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Some
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 drivers can
preform
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good
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 on the
test
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 because they were in a good
meantal
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mental
 or physical condition,
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 they were fully prepared
, if
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. If
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 the
goverment
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government
 introduced a law
the
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significant
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 of
a
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regulary
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regular
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 could save many lives and
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of course
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It
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 would help to improve
overall
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safty
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safety
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, Many drivers tend to forget some traffic rules or develop
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unsafe
 habits
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a
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constantly
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test
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 will
guranteed
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guarantee
 they remember some of them
,
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, there were a
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survey
 published by Cornell University says most of the individuals
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caused
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cause
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accidents
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they
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are not
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qualified
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,
a
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repeted
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repeated
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test
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tests
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 may help
to
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reduce the increase of
accidents
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 Gist of the matter, it could
caused
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cause
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 some
drawback
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drawbacks
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 like not having the time,
But
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but
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 clearly the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, saving
people
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people's
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 lives and
promote
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promoting
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 road
safty
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safety
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structure
Structure your writing with an intro, two or three body ideas, and a short conclusion.
task response
State your view clearly in the intro and keep it in the essay.
content
Give one or two clear examples to back each idea.
language
Use simple grammar and check spellings.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'however'.
content
Some good ideas on safety are shown.
structure
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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