The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about the rates of five types of
the
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industries
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through electricity in 1995 and 2005.
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, manufacturing was the
indusrtries
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industry
that used
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electrocity
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electricity
the most,
while
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sevice
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service
used
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electrocity
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electricity
the least. In
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detail, in 1995, the proportion of
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electrocity
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electricity
usage in manufacturing was 33% which was the
most
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highest
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among the five
industries
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. Food was the second most electrified industry with 24% and the fishery industry used 20% of the
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electrocity
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electricity
. The
industries
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of household and service accounted for 15% and 8% respectively
which
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were the least among the
industries
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. In 2005, manufacturing and food still used electricity the most and the second with 31% and 21% respectively. Meanwhile, household and service were not the
industries
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which used
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electrocity
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electricity
the least that
accouted
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accounting
for 20 % and 15%. The industry of fishery used
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electrocity
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electricity
the least with 13%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words industries, electrocity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • industries
  • electricity usage
  • 1995
  • 2005
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • service sector
  • manufacturing sector
  • residential sector
  • agricultural sector
  • main features
  • summarize
  • reporting
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