IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people believe that online libraries are more beneficial than physical libraries. To what extent do you agree or diagree?

It is argued that virtual
libraries
Use synonyms
 have more benefits as compared to physical
libraries
Use synonyms
.
This
Linking Words
 essay completely agrees with the idea that accessing
libraries
Use synonyms
 online is more advantageous than using physical ones. The reason for agreement with the mentioned idea will be presented in the following paragraphs. One
among
Change preposition
of
show examples
various
Correct article usage
the various
show examples
 reasons is the ability of wider access without time or location
limitation
Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
show examples
.
In other words
Linking Words
, individuals are able to access
vast
Correct article usage
a vast
show examples
 amount of knowledge worldwide with just
some
Correct determiner usage
a few
show examples
 clicks.
As a consequence
Linking Words
, it is provided for readers to study or research anytime, without
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
show examples
 to a physical location.
For instance
Linking Words
, I once needed a book for my thesis and had to visit the central library, which was quite far. When I tried online, I found the book easily and saved a lot of time. Being environmentally friendly is another advantage of online
libraries
Use synonyms
 over traditional ones.
That is
Linking Words
 to say, the consumption of
paper
Use synonyms
 will be cut down by going online
for obtaining
Change preposition
to obtain
show examples
 library
.
Check wording
materials.
show examples
For example
Linking Words
, in 2020, it was reported in the BMC journal that 75% of people who used to
were
Wrong verb form
be
show examples
 interested in physical
libraries
Use synonyms
, at present, they have become more fond of online
libraries
Use synonyms
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
paper
Use synonyms
 usage has been reduced by 60%.
To conclude
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 essay confirms that online
libraries
Use synonyms
 not only
doesnt
Wrong verb form
don't
show examples
 have
limitation
Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
show examples
 in location or time, but
also
Linking Words
 they cannot
cause
Verb problem
lead
show examples
in
Change preposition
to
show examples
 excessive use of
paper
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the more online
libraries
Use synonyms
 are opened, the less
paper
Use synonyms
 will be produced.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

improvement
State a clear claim in the intro and keep it in every part of the essay.
improvement
Use neat linking words to show how ideas fit together and to guide the reader.
grammar
Fix small grammar and spelling mistakes (such as apostrophes and preps) for accuracy.
advice
Use more precise and real examples, and check facts so they are true and fair.
advice
Try to show both sides a bit; even if you agree, mention limits of online books.
strength
The writer has a clear view on the topic.
strength
A real example is used to explain one point.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: