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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter -say what the participants liked about the hotel -explain why they were unhappy about the food -Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

Dear
Mr.
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 Smith, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to you to give you
a
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feed back
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feedback
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 about our company meeting that was held at your hotel, The Hayat International on
last
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 Friday. Everyone
,
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 who
attented
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attended
meeting
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the meeting
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like
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liked
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 the hotel, especially
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 the lighting, space, and enough parking space.
However
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, they had to face
inconvinience
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inconvenience
 during the meeting. The food that was served to the participants was not up to standard. It was cold
and
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 a few dishes from the menu had a high spice level,
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 the instructions were given
before handed
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 to keep the spice level mild. As we have had a good
relation
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from
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for
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 a long time, So, I would like to make a suggestion.
the
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 chef should give more attention to the food
prepration
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preparation
 and serving for the next time.
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, it would be best to
double check
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 the instructions to avoid misunderstandings. I would
appriciate
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appreciate
 your
considration
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consideration
. Yours sincerely, Lovprit Kaur

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Change 'feed back' to 'feedback' and 'attented' to 'attended'. Use 'inconvenience'.
structure
Make the text clearer by putting each new idea in its own paragraph and using shorter lines.
tone
Keep a formal tone with the right words and normal form.
content
Put the three parts in order: what was liked, why the food was not good, how to fix for next time.
content
Be precise in what you ask the manager to do, and say how you want the changes to be done.
tone
Polite opening and closing are used.
content
The letter notes some good points of the hotel, like space and parking.
convention
There is a clear aim to give feedback.
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