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tHE TABLE BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF HOUSEHOLDS WITH SELECTED ELECTRONIC GOODSIN NEWZELAND IN 2002 AND 2020. SUMMARIZE THE INFFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.

tHE TABLE BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF HOUSEHOLDS WITH SELECTED ELECTRONIC GOODSIN NEWZELAND IN 2002 AND 2020. SUMMARIZE THE INFFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.
The table chart elaborates, the percentage of items used at
house
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home
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 with specific electronic goods used in New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 during the period 2002 and 2020.
Overall
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, the electronic gadgets like cell
phone
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phones
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 had
of
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apply
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the highest popularity in New
Zeland
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Zealand
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,as well as, followed by computers more than in
the
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apply
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later years.
However
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,the
tread
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trend
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 showed minimum demand for digital
camera
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cameras
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 and
dishwasher
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dishwashers
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. To commence, the washing machine and
color
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colour
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 TV
was
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were
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 the highest used as
householdin
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household
 2002,which
was
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were
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 97%
,
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apply
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 and
95
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95%
 respectively,
while
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 after 8 years,
slightly
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they slightly
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raise
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rose
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 to 1% and 4%.
However
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, 50% of computers
was
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were
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used in 2002,
this
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steady
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raised
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rose
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 to 78% by 2020.
On the other hand
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,
Moreover
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, cell phone was the second lowest item used ,
that is
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 20%, which drastically increased to 80% by the deadline. On
contrary the
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the contrary
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,
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goods like Video
recorder
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recorders
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,
Dishwasher
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dishwashers
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were least
like
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liked
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 by New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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 in the first
phast
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phase
,
this
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 exhits 75%, 45% in the first phase,
additionally
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, they dropped to 60%,55% by 2020. Yet
Digital
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the Digital
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 camera showed a drastic peaking in electronic
good
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goods
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 to 38%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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