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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant."

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant."
The two maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 a layout of a science park in 2008 and
how
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its current appearance.
Overall
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, the area underwent a significant development, with new facilities
were
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being
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 introduced at the expense of the grassland,
along with
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 major
improvments
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improvements
 to the infrastructure. In 2008, the
centeral
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central
 area was occupied by a large car park surrounded by a grassland,
while
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 the
nothweatern
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northwestern
 area
cosisted
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consisted
 mainly
a
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of a
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green space. A railway located in the southern region behind two major
building
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buildings
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the
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, the
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cyber security
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 and IT centre.
Moreover
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, the offices and the reception
were
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faced a road on
northeastern
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the northeastern
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 side of the map.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
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, major changes
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have occured
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occured
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occurred
including
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, including
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,
addtion
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addition
 of bus
stop
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stops
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, train
station
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stations
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, and a cycling path to
facilitates
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facilitate
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the
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apply
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accessibility to the park using various types of
transportaion
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transportation
. In
constrat
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contrast
, on the
west
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west,
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 the grassland
were
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was
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 removed and replaced by research and development
building
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buildings
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,
while
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 on the
east
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east,
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 it was converted
in
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into
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 to new
exapnsion
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expansion
 of
cyber security
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cybersecurity
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 in
addtion
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addition
of
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to
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shorting
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shortening
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 the parking zone.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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