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Writing Samples
Band 4

Many of the products we buy nowadays break or wear out very quickly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for manufacturers and the public?

These days, a lot of
products
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 available in the market break down in a short period of time.
This
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,
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 the positives and the
negetives
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negatives
 of the aforementioned statement in
case
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the case
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 of
producer
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producers
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as well as
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 consumers. There are several plus points of the given trend for the manufacturing companies. The paramount one is, increase in sales.
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, things used by
people
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 on
daily
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 basis will still be in demand even if they wear out fast. Porcelain crockery,
for instance
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, has
short
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a short
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 life
as compare
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 to stainless steel
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however
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 it is still in trend globally as it is widely used in big hotels, restaurants, and at
homes
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. In case of customers, 
people
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 get to use
products
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 with new
designes
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designs
 and latest features available in the market.
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, it
also
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 has various negatives for
people
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, the first one is, increase in expenses. Spending money on the necessary stuff more often
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 wipes away a big chunk of money
out of
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from
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 their salary.
This
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 leads to
financial
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a financial
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 crisis for
lower
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the lower
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 middle class. Clothing,
for instance
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, is usually imported from China, which
cost
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costs
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 less to big brands, but the
quality
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 is not good they wear out easily. So,
people
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 have to invest more
for
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in
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the
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basic clothing needs. In case of manufacturers, those who
sells
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sell
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 bad
quality
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 goods
,
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 often lose their customers, as there
is
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are
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 a lot of
competetors
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competitors
 in the area who sell
same
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the same
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products
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 in better
quality
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 and at
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an afforable
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afforable
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affordable
 price. To recapitulate,
although
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 wearing out of
products
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 gives a few benefits to
buyer
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the buyer
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 and seller: Increase in sales
,
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apply
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 and
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 to use
latest
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the latest
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 model of the product.
However
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,
It
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it
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 leads to
lose
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loss
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 of customers if the
quality
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 is bad
,
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moreover
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,
people
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 have to spend money on
same
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the same
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 product again and again, which is frustrating.

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structure
Plan your essay. Have a short intro, two body parts, and a short end.
development
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language
Fix bad spell and gram mistakes.
coherence
Use linking word to join idea so text flow.
task
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a short end that repeats main idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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