The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans.

The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans.
The illustration depicts the cycle of
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aluminum
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aluminium
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drinks
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drink
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cans
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recycling. The 4-step cycle begins with collecting the
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aluminum
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aluminium
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drinks
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cans
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from the bin and ends with the new product presentation in the
drinks
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machines.
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is
achived
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achieved
with recycling the used
cans
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and making them
in
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new products that can be used. The process starts with taking the containers from the bins where they have been thrown out and transporting them with a truck to a factory where they can be
recyceled
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recycled
. In the
factory
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factory,
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the
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aluminum
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aluminium
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can is melted
in to
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into
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an
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apply
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old
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aluminum
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aluminium
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, which
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then is
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is then
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made
in to
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into
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new
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aluminum
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aluminium
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blocks. These blocks
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then are
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are then
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made
in to
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into
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rolls, so that
after
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it
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they
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can serve as a material for the new can making. At the
last
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step, the
cans
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are put in the
drinks
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machine
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machine,
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where they are again taken out and used, which follows up with the whole cycle happening again.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminum, drinks, cans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling process
  • Aluminium cans
  • Collection and sorting
  • Recycling facility
  • High-temperature furnaces
  • Liquid aluminium
  • Ingots
  • Rolling mill
  • Thin sheets
  • Cutting and shaping
  • Reforming
  • Sterilized
  • Beverages
  • Distribution
  • Retailers
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