How we can eliminate disease from a country. Tell the role of government and citizens in it

The goal of eliminating diseases in the world is complex, but it is attainable. There are many ways 
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which it spreads.
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, it can be alleviated by the support of the government and individuals. The government plays a crucial role in alleviating diseases
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a country. It helps the nation by investing in medical
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, providing advanced therapies, and innovative medical procedures
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of income.
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, higher authorities need to offer vaccinations for contagious diseases like cowpox.
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, in Pakistan, children are vaccinated with the polio vaccination until age 5 at no cost, because it is the way to prevent  children from the fatal
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disease
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that has no cure. The involvement of individuals
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role in the prevention of infection. Addressing the root causes and volunteering in awareness campaigns
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best approach to eliminate
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. These awareness campaigns must address the importance of hygiene
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, including washing hands, proper sanitation, and food handling, because poor hygiene is a leading cause of infections
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as the flu,
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,common cold, gum
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, and malaria.
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, Malaria, a life-threatening
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caused by the parasite transmitted by infected mosquitoes, which breed in water tanks, uncovered drains, and even dams, is endemic in Pakistan. In 2023, malaria cases were reported.
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, an active campaign "Suthra Punjab" was launched by
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Pakistan. In conclusion, both the government and citizens have the ability to eliminate infections by providing innovative procedures, vaccinations for different infections, and raising awareness among people about the issues of unhygienic conditions.

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Task response: You answer the prompt and say how the government and people can help. To be stronger, add steps the gov can take and how people can join. Give a short plan with clear actions and a final point.
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Coherence and cohesion: Use one clear idea in each paragraph. Use simple link words to join ideas, e.g., in addition, also, but, for example, therefore. Make sure each sentence leads to the next.
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The essay shows a view that both the government and people have a role.
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It uses a country example (Pakistan) to back a point.
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Language is clear and easy to read.
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