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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years
The pie chart illustrates the destination of Anthropology
graduates
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 from one university after getting their degrees. The table indicates their
salaries
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 in various types of occupations after five years'
work
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the largest proportion of
graduates
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 chose full-time,
whereas
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 the smallest proportion of them opted for part-time
work
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 and postgraduate study.
Moreover
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,
students
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 who worked as freelance consultants and in the
government
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sector
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 earned higher
salaries
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.
To begin
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 with, finding full-time
work
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 was really popular among them, and more than half of the
students
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 worked full-time.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of
students
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 choosing part-time
work
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 and those who were unemployed was approximately equal, at around 10%.
Additionally
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, less than one in ten of them found a full-time postgraduate study.
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, 8% of them had an unknown destination, and around 5% of them worked in a part-time position
along with
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 postgraduate study.
Apart from
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this
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,
students
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 who took up jobs in private companies had the lowest
salaries
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. It was reported that 35% of them earned between $50,000 and $74,999.
In contrast
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, almost 10% of them are paid less than $50,000. The percentage of
students
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 who worked for freelance consultants and the
government
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sector
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 earning less than $75,000 was equal. The highest amount of
salaries
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 was seen in the
government
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sector
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, which paid more than $100,000 after 5 years. All in all,
it is clear that
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 working in full-time
work
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 was common among Anthropology
graduates
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, and working for freelance consultants and the
government
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sector
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 had more financial benefits for
graduates
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, salaries, work, students, government, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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