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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the informaiton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two plans show how the farm has changed between 1950 and today.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the site has been significantly developed, with several new facilities added. At the same time, some original features
remined
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remained
 in the same location. In 1950, the central part was occupied by a big sheep
area
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 to the north of the farmhouse, but
this
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 has been replaced by two parking areas, a camping field and solar panels. The barn under the sheep
area
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 was redeveloped into holiday cottages, and
the
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a
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 barn was constructed next to the chicken
area
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.
In contrast
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, the location of fruit trees, vegetables,
farmhouse
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the farmhouse
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 and
chicken
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the chicken
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area
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 are unchanged. The tracks were transformed into roads
but
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, but
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 the layout remains the same as well. The
reiver
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river
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 sounding the orchards
area
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also
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is also
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 unchanged.

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improvement
Make a clear plan. Start with one short intro, then put changes year by year, then end with a short end line.
fact-check
Check the facts in your note. Some parts are unclear or wrong. Keep to real changes you say.
structure
Use simple link words to show contrast and order: 'first', 'next', 'but', 'also', 'however'.
grammar
Use correct spell and grammar. 'remained', 'surrounding', etc.
overview
You give a clear overall idea that the site changes a lot.
content
You give some specific changes like parking areas and solar panels.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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