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Band 3.5

New parents should attend parenting classes to learn how to bring up their children well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people believe that parents should
to
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apply
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learn how they deal with their
children
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through
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by
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 going to parenting
class
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classes
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. I completely agree with
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the view
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 for several reasons.
Firstly
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, if we need
confidente
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confident
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 and good
children
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, we should
to
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apply
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learn how to deal with our
children
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.
This
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 is because
humen
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humans
 must
to
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apply
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know
every thing
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everything
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relats
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related
 to baby life.
This
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 class can help them to
anderstand
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understand
 skills and abilities
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at in
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in
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an
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 early time that help them to
prapare
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prepare
 the environment
of
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for
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baby
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the baby
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.
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, government hospitals offer awareness programs to
mam
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mom
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 and dad that help them to learn how they deal well with their child.
As a result
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, we will find
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 and a conscious generation because they
born
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were born
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 in
awareness
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an awareness
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 environment.
However
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, in some cases,
baby
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a baby
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born
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is born
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 ill
which
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, which
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 they need to take care
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of widly
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widly
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widely
. To
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, if
perants
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parents
 had
prepard
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prepared
, they can deal with these cases.
when
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 they understand to problem
early
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early,
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 they will avoid
error
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errors
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 and treat diseases in
easy
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an easy
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 way.
In
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For
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 instance, I know one of my family when she was pregnant
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,
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her doctor told her child
will
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would
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 have genetic diseases.
Then
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,
She
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she
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enrolls
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enrols
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 with her husband
to
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on
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aprogram
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a program
 about genetic diseases
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as
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, as
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 a result, they know how to deal with their
children
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 well. In conclusion, I strongly agree with
this
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statment
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statement
 because we find
healthy
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a healthy
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 family
that is
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 free of
problem
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problems
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.
In addition
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,
children
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 can live
natural
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a natural
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 life.

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Planning
Plan what you want to say before you write. Make one idea per paragraph.
Content
Be clear about your view in the start and end. Say you agree in the intro and again in the end.
Grammar
Use simple grammar. check verb form and subject. For example 'parents should learn' not 'parents should to learn'.
Coherence
Add linking words to join ideas: first, also, for example, but, so, in the end.
Structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Give one small example for that idea.
Accuracy
Check spelling and punctuation so the text is easy to read.
Strength
The writer has a clear view and uses some reasons.
Strength
Some examples are used to back points.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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