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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year
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, females had higher illiteracy
rates
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 than males in all regions.
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, developed countries recorded the lowest figures,
whereas
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 South
Asia
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 had by far the highest. In developed countries, illiteracy was extremely low, at about 1% for females and close to 0% for males. In comparison, East
Asia
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/Oceania showed higher
rates
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, with figures of around 28% for females and 11% for males. These levels were still above those in Latin America/Caribbean, where the proportions stood at roughly 10% and 7% respectively. The other three regions displayed much higher levels of illiteracy. Male
rates
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 ranged from 29% in the Arab States to nearly 50% in South
Asia
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 and Sub-Saharan Africa. Female
rates
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 were significantly higher, reaching about 55% in South
Asia
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 and around 50% in Sub-Saharan Africa and the Arab States.
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, the gender gap in these regions was substantial.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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