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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year
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estimated
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the estimated
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 world
illiteracy
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rates
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 by region and by gender for the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, the
illiteracy
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rates
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 of
female
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females
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 surpassed
that
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 of
male
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males
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 in every region shown on the chart.
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, the figure for developed countries accounted for the smallest share,
while
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 the proportion of South Asia took up the largest. In detail, the percentage of
female
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females
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 in developed countries was roughly twice that of
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males
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, though they both had comparatively low
illiteracy
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rates
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, which were around _% for
female
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females
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 and _% for
male
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males
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.
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,
although
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 the
illiteracy
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 rate in East Asia/Oceania, which was nearly 28%, was much higher than that of Latin
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America
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/Caribbean, which was 12%, the figure for
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males
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 was lower. The rest 3
regions
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all had relatively high
illiteracy
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rates
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. The figure of
male
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males
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 in the
regions
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were
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 around 30–50%, the lowest of which was 29% in Arab States.
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, the figures for
female
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females
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 in the 3
regions
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 were considerably high. The highest was approximately 55% in South Asia. Notably, the gender differences
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illiteracy
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rates
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 in the 3
regions
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 were significant.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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