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Number of applicant from different countries to UK universities

The bar chart illustrates
applicants
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number
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 from three countries , namely
Britain
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, the
UAE
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 and
India
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 , to the UK Universities during five periods, from 1999 to 2003.
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, it is evident that there was a gradual increase over the years.
Britain
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 experienced the highest
number
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 of
applicants
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,
India
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.
However
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, the
UAE
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 had the lowest popularity. From the
Britain
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 site
which
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 recorded between just under 20000 and 25000. Compared with the
last
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 year,
Britain
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 started to decline by approximately 500.
On the Other hand
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,
India
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 remarked the same
number
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 of
applicants
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, almost 250000.
By contrast
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, the
UAE
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 had the lowest figure, in which is recorded 5000 in 1999 , and the
last
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 year had a double
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. Around 10000
applicants
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 were witnessed in two Countries, the
UAE
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 and
India
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.
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 analysing the chart , it is striking to note that there were close numbers in
Britain
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 roughly above 20000 in 2002,2002, 2003, respectively.

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task response
Give a clear start: say what the chart shows and the main idea in one line.
grammar
Fix grammar and use right verb form. Use simple present where the chart shows things that happen.
data
Keep numbers right and do not mix forms. Use digits for exact numbers or write in words consistently.
coherence
Make the plan clear: 1) intro, 2) overview, 3) body with a few clear points, 4) short final line.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words: and, but, however, while, so.
lexical
Do not repeat the same words. Use new but easy words.
data
Give exact values and contrasts, like ‘Britain had about 20 000 in 1999 and rose then fell’.
content
The writer gives an overall trend.
structure
There is some data for each country.
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