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Writing Samples
Band 5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the world population in four countries in 1950 and 2002,
as well as
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 predictions for 2050.
Overall
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, China and India had the largest shares of the global population during the whole period,
while
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 Japan had the lowest figures. In 1950, China recorded the highest proportion at 23%.
This
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 number fell slightly to 20% in 2002 and is expected to drop
further
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 to 15% by 2050. India
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 the other hand, shows a gradual increase. Its share rose from 15% in 1950 to 17% in 2002
and
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 it is projected to reach 18% in 2050. The USA
also
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 experienced a small decline, from 7% in 1950 to around 5% in 2002, and its share is predicted to remain stable by 2050. Japan saw the most noticeable decrease, falling from 4% in 1950 to 3% in 2002, and it is expected to reach only 1% by 2050

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task response
Good job. You give the big idea at the start and you show numbers. To push your score higher, add a short end line that sums the main fact. Make sure you cover all parts of the task the same way for 1950, 2002 and 2050.
coherence and paragraphing
Use linking words to move from one idea to the next, like and, but, also, then. Put a new space for each idea so it is easy to read. Make two parts: one for intro and one for details, and a short line for the trend.
strength
Clear overall trend that China and India have the largest share and Japan the lowest
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Data is given for all four countries in all three years
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Comparisons are made between years and among countries
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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