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Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Many think that individuals with
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a third
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third grade
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third-grade
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degree
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 can land a
job
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 easily because most of the
high paying
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high-paying
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workplace
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workplaces
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 have a condition for having a mandatory College
degree
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.
However
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, I believe that the skills and experiences matter more as those employees have been doing
same
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the same
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work
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 and make
minimum
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minimal
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 errors.
Mostly
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people
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 tend to go to University choosing
specific
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a specific
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 subject. It is like
gateway
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a gateway
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 for starting a career so that they can get familiar
to
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with
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 that certain dream
job
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. The main reason for getting a
degree
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 is
because
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that
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 many
job
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requirement
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requirements
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 include
a
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apply
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proof of the candidate having
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degree
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a degree
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on
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in
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 the related
field
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,
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;
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otherwise
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otherwise,
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 that person is
categorized
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categorised
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 as “
not-valid
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not valid
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”.
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: there is a
job
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 in one of the big companies called Invisible
and
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, and
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 that company hire
those
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apply
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people
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 having only PHD
degree
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 in any science
field
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though
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, though
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 the main
work
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 responsibility is to train Artificial Intelligence, and can be done by those
people
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 with basic English. There are many companies which hire
an
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apply
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employee based on their talent and the years of
time
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experience
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 they spend doing that
work
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. It is because they tend to make
less
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fewer
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 mistakes and don’t even have to try
best
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their best
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 to do
work
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 perfectly. Those employees are already trained enough and do not need the guidance to initiate the
work
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 as needed by
a
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the
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 company. Mostly IT
company
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companies
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 prefer to accept
the
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apply
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employee by judging them based on their experience in
certain
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a certain
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field
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 and
also
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 testing them through assessments rather than the grades they had in their
degree
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. So, many
people
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 are engaged
on
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in
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this
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 IT
field
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 just by learning the skills from
Youtube
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YouTube
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 or just from a three-month skill
developing
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development
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 class and
experience
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the experience
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 they got from an Internship or a project they developed. In conclusion, though grades are important to apply
some
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for some
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job
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jobs
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 because of their strict requirements, I think many workplaces
gives
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give
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 more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to
over talented
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over-talented
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people
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and
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apply
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who have spent many years of time doing
same
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the same
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work
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 because of their high accuracy at
work
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.

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task response
Explain both sides with a short plan in the intro. Then give your view clearly in the last part.
coherence
Make clear order. Use linking words (first, next, but, also, however, finally) to show how your ideas go with each other.
language
Use simple and correct words. Check spellings and grammar. The meaning should be easy to get.
idea
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
example
There are some examples given to back up ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitive advantage
  • in-depth knowledge
  • theoretical understanding
  • networking opportunities
  • prerequisite
  • professions
  • practical, hands-on knowledge
  • perform tasks efficiently and effectively
  • actual ability
  • deliver results
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • real-world settings
  • blend of both education and practical experience
  • theoretical concepts
  • ideal scenario
  • bolstered by practical application
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