If all workers in a company were paid exact same wage regardless of job role there would be much more harmony and cooperation between staff. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people claim that if all
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are paid the same amount, irrespective of their role,
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it would bring peace and collaboration in a
workplace
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. I completely disagree with the following statement, as it is not fair and may create chaos inside the office.
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the issue
further
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. Focusing
firstly
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on the fairness, the
workers
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of higher
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will be exploited when there is no distinction in terms of income between roles.
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issue may cause economic and social instability, resulting in deep frustration.
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, if a janitor is paid as much as the HR of a
company
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then
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it would result in
significant
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unfair advantage, as one requires several years of educational qualification
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job experience,
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the other requires only physical effort.
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, a
workplace
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would become
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, because people will not be willing to put in extra effort for a job
that is
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not
well appreciated
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. Not only that,
when
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workers
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are equally paid, it will create chaos in the
workplace
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.
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, it will shift the corporate
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social-hierarchy
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in the
workplace
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, creating change in attitude and respect of the
workers
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. The pay grade determines who is in power
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for example
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, a boss of an office will
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paid higher than the employee of a particular office, which indirectly creates a sense of position in power for that individual.
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shift is brutal and may cause indiscipline in the
workplace
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and
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of accountability, resulting
bankruptcy
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of a company in
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worst case
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scenario. In conclusion,
although
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workers
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that
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who
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are equally paid
promotes
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promote
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equality for all,
but
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it definitely does not support justice.
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may seem like an excellent way
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is
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certainly preposterous in the long run by creating inequality and instability in the
workplace
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.

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evidence
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grammar
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structure
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argument
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmony
  • cohesion
  • financial incentive
  • productivity
  • equity
  • organizational culture
  • highly skilled professionals
  • innovation and competitiveness
  • redistribution of tasks
  • job satisfaction
  • meritocracy
  • contributions and achievements
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