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Volunteer work is when people offer their time and effort to help others without being paid. Students often volunteer to gain valuable experience and give back to the community. High school and university students should be required to complete a certain number of volunteer hours before graduating. Do you agree or disagree?

5-To test
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 idea, the authors set up a five-stage route for human embryonic stem
cells
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. The
cells
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 moved from definitive endoderm to
gut like
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gut-like
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 and pancreatic progenitor stages,
then
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 on to endocrine
cells
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 that make pancreatic hormones. Early on, the team used real-time PCR to follow shifts in more than thirty lineage markers and see which
cells
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 stayed on a pancreatic path. They
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 checked protein patterns with immunofluorescence and western blots, with flow cytometry and ELISA as broader readouts.
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, they measured insulin content and C-peptide release and examined secretory granules by electron microscopy to judge how β-
cells
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-like these
cells
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 had become.

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structure
Add a short opening line that shows what you will explain.
language
Keep a clear link from step to step with words like first, next, finally.
grammar
Fix small mistakes like gut-like and beta cells phrasing.
content
Try to use simple words and explain any hard terms.
structure
The text shows a clear order of steps in testing.
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It gives many exact tests and results to back up ideas.
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The work has many details on method use.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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