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In some countries, young people often decide to work or travel for a time before they start their university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of doing this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A few figures in the results matter most. Figure 1a, with 1b and 2a-e, sets out a five-step route from endoderm to pancreatic progenitors
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 route line up with a β-cells path. In the endocrine panels (3e, f and 4),
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 cells sit in a small island with other islet hormones and general endocrine markers. In 5b, about 7-12% of the cells are insulin-positive, with a wider synaptophysin-positive pool. DTZ-picked cells in 6a have insulin in the adult islet range.
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 6b shows C-peptide release to KCl, tolbutamide as a KATP channel blocker, and nutrient secretagogues, close to adult islet
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task
This text is not an IELTS essay. It reads like a lab report. For a Task 2 score, please give a clear essay on the given topic.
structure
Give a clear view in the first part and state your stance.
coherence
Use four to five short paragraphs: intro, two or three body parts, and a short conclusion.
style
Use short, simple sentences and link words to show how ideas go together.
structure
The text follows a clear order of steps and uses numbers.
content
Data are given in exact numbers, which helps understanding.
purpose
The aim of showing results is clear in the write up.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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