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Band 2

Todays more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative.

The paper ends up with “a five-stage protocol” that takes hES cells through an endoderm route close to normal pancreatic development. Along
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 endocrine step that “has not been reported” before. By the final stage, the cultures hold β-like insulin cells with adult-like insulin levels, β-cell markers and dense secretory granules that, in their word, “contain many cell components critical to β-cell function”, and C-peptide release is regulated to KCl, tolbutamide and nutrient stimuli. Because glucose has little effect, they write that these cells” may resemble immature fetal
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” yet still see hES cells as a possible “renewable source of pancreatic β-cells for people with diabetes”.

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Task
Answer the task by giving your view on robots at home and work. Say if you think it is good or bad, and give a clear reason.
Coherence
Make a clear plan. Put your main idea first, then give 2 or 3 reasons with a short example.
Coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go together (first, next, also, but, so).
Grammatical
Check grammar and form, make simple and clear sentences.
Attempt
The topic is set and there is some idea of use of tech.
Content
Some direct facts are used.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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