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Band 1.5

Some people like reading books for knowledge and pleasure; others prefer getting information and entertainment on the internet. What is your opinion? Write an essay at least 200 words.

The study leaves some clear limits. In adult islets, almost all proinsulin is turned into insulin, about
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97%
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, but these hES-derived
cells
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 don’t reach that. C-peptide release still responds to simple drug and
nutrients
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 cues. Glucose does very little, and in their
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 the
insulin positive
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cells
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 “may resemble immature fetal β-
cells
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” rather than mature β-
cells
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. In these
cells
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, NKX6-1 and PDX1 are not maintained, and the usual MAF-family switch is missing, so they don’t match mature β-
cells
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. Only about “7-12%” of
cells
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 are insulin positive, and the share may drop when the endoderm step is weak, and it differs between hES lines. One line in the discussion calls the differentiation “inducive or selective”. For now, how these β-
cells
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 develop is still not clear.

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task response
State a clear aim at the start and keep to it.
coherence
Make a plan with a start, middle, and end. Use linking words to guide the reader.
structure
Use a simple plan for the text: one idea per section and a short closing.
composition
Add more general ideas before the facts and end with a short, clear view.
content
Use the same strong facts but explain what they mean in plain words.
content
It uses many exact numbers to show limits.
analysis
It shows why the cells may seem like young cells, not full ones.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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