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The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts the citizens of the UK
,
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 visiting different places from 1993 to 2013. The figures are
expresssed
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expressed
 on the scale of billions.
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, the most striking feature is that people travelling during
holiday's
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holidays
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,
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 maintained a clear lead over
others
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others,
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while
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 miscellaneous stood at the lowest position throughout the decade.
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 with, in 1993, natives
prefered
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preferred
 their journey on their free
days
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that
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which
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 recorded around 9
billions
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billion
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.
At
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the
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second place
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 were the business travellers with close to 2.5
Billions
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,meeting with friends or relatives and unknown remained the
last
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 priority with roughly 1Billion. In 1998, holidays saw a stable increase
by
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 12
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Billion
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billion
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.
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, business
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meeting
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to
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with
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 loved ones had
obsereved
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observed
 a gradual rise with approximately 2.5
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Billion
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billion
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.
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, in 2008, annual leave reached
at
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its peak
crossing
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, crossing
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 25
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Billion
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billion
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.
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, the figures for professionals and visiting colleagues marked about 4
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Billion
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billion
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. In 2013, the data
reveals
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 that free days were highest and
unkown
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unknown
 were lowest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • steady increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • notable rise/fall
  • economic conditions
  • currency exchange rates
  • international tourism
  • disposable income
  • consumer behavior
  • trend analysis
  • data points
  • historical context
  • inflation-adjusted spending
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