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Band 3.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given maps provided information about a port in 2000, and the changes were made throughout the years, and how it appears today.  
Overall
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, it can be seen that changes and the inclusion of new services are made accessible to people; the majority happen alongside the main
road
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 and the
road
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 that leads to the hotel today.  
Firstly
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, it can be noticed that the castle turns into a hotel, which is situated in the
southeastcorner
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southeast corner
 of the map.
Also
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, changes are made alongside the
road
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, which leads to the hotel today;
for instance
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, cafes and shops are open beside the
road
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, and one car park shifts to a new area, which is connected with the main
road
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. But no change is made for the second car location, which is still located in their previous location, in the
northwestcorner
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northwest corner
 of the map.
In addition
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, marine (private yachts) and fishing boats interchange their location,
andone
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and one
 new dock is added.
Furthermore
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, one shower and toilet are added close to the main
road
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 for the passengers.

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task
Start with a short overall view of the port in 2000 and how it looks now.
task
List the main changes in clear order, then add a sentence to compare how the port was and is now.
coherence
Use a new paragraph for each idea, and begin with a topic sentence.
coherence
Keep a steady time frame (2000 then today) and use the same set of words to compare.
grammar
Use simple, clear words. Check grammar and use full stops well.
strength
The writer names concrete changes (castle to hotel, new dock, dock location, new toilet/shower).
strength
The essay uses connectors (Firstly, In addition, Furthermore) to show order.
strength
An overall attempt to compare two maps shows effort in Task 1."
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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