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The graph and chart below give information about 3D cinema screens and film releases. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph and chart below give information about 3D cinema screens and film releases. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph and chart provide information about global digital 3D cinema
screens
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 and the
figure
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number
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 of 3D film releases between 2005 and 2012.
Overall
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, both figures increased substantially over the period. The growth of 3D
screens
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 was especially massive after 2008,
while
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 the number of 3D films
also
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 went up, with
live action
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live-action
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 films showing the most noticeable growth. In the year 2005, the
statistic
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 of digital 3D
screens
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was
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 almost zero and remained low till 2008. From 2009, the figure increased and reached about 40000
screens
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 by 2011. A similar upward trend was noticed in film releases.
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, both categories produced only a small number from 2005 to 2008.
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, releases increased rapidly after 2009. Live action movies went up the fastest and reached almost 70 by 2012.
On the other hand
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, animation did not show much of an increase after 2010 , and the most it reached was approximately twenty-five.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words screens with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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