You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •explain the important event •apologies for the situation •suggest a new arrangement

Dear Sam, How're you? I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to you to inform you about a little change in my
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plans. I was going to visit you in Canada on January 7th, as we decided, but now
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brother is getting married same month on
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. I can only travel afterwards. I am really sorry, I know we already planned everything
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ago, but
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sudden news to me.
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I can not come early because of the wedding,
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, I will make it up to you
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and bring you some
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delicious
sweets.
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, I am thinking
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my tickets to after January 15th. Please let me know
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does
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for you
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If not, we can discuss the dates again. I understand, now that you have already applied for the vacation, you will have to talk to your manager to make adjustments.
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, I apologise for the changes, and I will be waiting for your response. Yours lovingly, Lovprit Kaur

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Put the main news in a clear line after the greeting so the reader sees the change right away.
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Use simple spelling and check words like 'delicious' and 'apology' if you use them.
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Try to split the note into clear parts. Start a new paragraph for the event, a new one for the apology, and a new one for the date change.
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Keep a polite and calm tone. Short, plain lines help a lot.
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The letter is kind and warm in tone.
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It covers all three points: the news, the sorry, and the new plan.
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The greeting and closing are there.
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