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Demand for oil and gas is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
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oil
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 and gas is rising.
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, it is suggested that remote locations are the best options to get essential sources of
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fuels
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fuel
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 for the population.
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this
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 can
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serve as a solution to the issue, there are numerous repercussions which surpass the benefits. On the one hand,extracting
oil
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 in untouched areas
offer
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 safety to individuals. It is undeniable that
so
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in
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 as to dig out and get the
oil
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, government officials
constuct
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construct
 imperative factories on these sites. They use devices which can emit hazardous fumes
to
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 the air, posing a
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threat
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 to the well-being of the population. If these
kind
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 of plants are far from residential areas, the level of risk will be lower. Another aspect that should be mentioned is that it gives the opportunity to supply people with
the
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fuels
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fuel
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 constantly. As individuals have been
utilizing
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fuels
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 for a long time, it is getting difficult to provide
necessary
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the necessary
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 quantity of them. Sources which are nearby have already been used and
almost
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 on the verge of
dissappearance
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disappearance
.
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, remote locations are the optimal option to supply the citizens with energy.
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,
oil
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 and gas extractions in untouched sites have several ramifications. One is
an
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environmental destruction.
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 of human beings in
such
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 areas
arises
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raises
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 a number of problems related to
the
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nature.
Constuction
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Construction
 work and digging the ground impact on the plants and
animals'
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animals
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 life which inhabit
in
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these sites and thrive freely. Another incentive that ought to be considered is the cost. That delivering
fuels
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 to the residents from
far
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a far
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 distance costs a fortune is a fact. Because the government bodies have to build roads in order to carry
oil
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 by trucks or install long pipelines to connect two distinct destinations and bring the gas.
This
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 demands a great deal of funding to implement.
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, it
should
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 be better if they try to find more beneficial approaches to address the issue. In conclusion, sources from remote places might be handy for the health of the people and can be a
long term
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 supplement, yet a detrimental influence on the flora and fauna and
cost
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the cost
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 far
outweigh
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outweighs
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 its positive sides.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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