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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of the birth country of people living in
Australia
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,
along with
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 a table that provides detailed information about where they live now.
Overall
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, it can be observed that a large number of citizens were born in
Australia
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, around three segments of the pie graph.
Moreover
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, almost all of them chose to live in a city rather than rural areas, with a ratio of eight to two. Taking a closer look, there is a significant gap between the countries, with the majority of residents born in
Australia
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, about 73%.
While
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 the remaning 27% is divided between four countries, the Netherlands with the largest proportion, reaching 14%, followed by a close
second,
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New Zealand with 7%.
Furthermore
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, the
last
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 7% is for the United Kingdom, China, and others. Regarding their living, many prefer to live in a city with a rate ranging between 80 to 99%. Individuals born in New Zealand and
Australia
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 who live in rural areas represent 20 and 17%, respectively,
whereas
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 China holds the lowest value for people living in rural regions with 1%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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