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The table and the chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table and the chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The table gives information about how much
money
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 was spent by
students
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 who study abroad,
while
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 the bar chart compares the average amount of
money
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 spent by
students
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 per week
while
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 studying abroad in four different
countries
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. In general, what stands out from the graphs is that
students
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 who live in
country
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 A spend a great amount of
money
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,
while
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 in
country
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 D, they spend the lowest amount of
money
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.
Moreover
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, in all
countries
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, daily expenses were the highest. Looking more closely at the table, in
country
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 A,
students
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’ total expenditure was the largest among others, with 875$. In
country
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B
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,
students
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 spend a bit less than in
country
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 A, with 735$. 540$ was accounted for in
country
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 C. In terms of
country
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D
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, D
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had the minimum expenditure of 435$.
According to
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 the bar chart, living cost was at
athe
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the
 top of the list, 430$ and 320$ recorded in
countries
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 A and
B
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, respectively. As for
countries
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 C and D, they spend 275$ and 225$, in that order. Turning to the tuition fees, in
country
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 A considered much higher than in
country
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 D, with 358% and 235$. In
country
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B
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,
students
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 spend 320$ for tuition
while
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 in
country
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 C,
students
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 spend a bit less, with 250$. When it comes to accommodation expenditures were highest in
country
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B
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, with 280$. In other
countries
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, they spend approximately 240$ and 200$.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, students, countries, country, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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