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Many of the products we buy nowadays break or wear out very quickly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for manufacturers and the public?

Nowadays,
the
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most
people
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 mention that¸ there are
lot
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a lot
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 of
lower items
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lower-priced
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 products
in
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for
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sales
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sale
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. In
this
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 essay, I will touch on both
benefits
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the benefits
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 and drawbacks of these goods
producing
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production
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, from different aspects,
such
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 as satisfaction, financial, economic and etc.
Initially
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, one of the most important advantages of it is being cheaper.
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 why, if you get tired
from
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of
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 one kind of clothes, you could purchase various colours or
other
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another
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 design
of
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apply
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it
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. You can buy different
type
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types
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pens
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of pens
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, bags, trousers and so on.
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, they wouldn’t
make
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a
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pressure on the family budget.
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,
people
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 will feel
frustration
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frustrated
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 if their objects couldn’t endure enough or they can’t use them as
waited
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expected
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. Recently, each of us
are
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is
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 searching
about
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for
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product
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products
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 before
receive
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receiving them
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, and we are waiting
them
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for them
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 as in
promotion
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adds
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ads
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. But if it is not beautiful or
same
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the same
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 as we observed, we feel the worth. I
am
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remember
,
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have
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ordered
one
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a
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 t-shirt and it had perfect material and colour,
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nevertheless
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nevertheless,
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 when I took my cargo it wasn’t like a photo. After 2 or 3 times washing it
wear
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wears
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 out, too.
Moreover
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,
this
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species
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species'
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 products
are
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apply
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damage
brand
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the brand
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 of
company
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the company
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 and
producer
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the producer
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 state.
Therefore
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, if items break in a
little
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short
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 time,
this
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fluence
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influence
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 to marketing of that
compony
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company
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with
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in
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 the worst way.
For instance
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, nowadays
the
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most
people
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over
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in
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 the world
,
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 don’t like the objects which has made in
Chine
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China
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due to
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,
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apply
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 bad
feedbacks
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feedback
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. In conclusion, I would agree with that, there are more drawbacks
about
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to
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 making
frail
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fragile
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 goods.
As a result
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, a lot of
people
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 suffer
about
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from
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 choosing options when they
shopping
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shop
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.
Furthermore
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, there are many falsifier
seller
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sellers
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 who tell
a
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lie
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lies
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 about offering output.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear map: intro with your view, two body paragraphs for pro and con, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Use simple links to connect ideas, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', and 'therefore'.
language
Be careful with grammar and spelling; read again to fix mistakes that hide your meaning.
content
Give one clear example in each body paragraph and explain why it matters.
content
You try to cover both sides of the issue.
content
You give a real life example (t-shirt) to show a point.
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