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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.
The line charts provide key information about the number of
the
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apply
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guests who visit the UK for various
objects
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purposes
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. From 1989 to 2009. The units are measured in
millions
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 of visitors.
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, it is clear from the graph that the individuals who want to spend
vacation
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a vacation
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 in London made up the majority of visitors.
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 the lowest share of
travelers
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travellers
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were come
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came
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 to meet their relatives.
According to
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 what is shown, the
figures
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number
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 of bodies were come to visit the UK started with about 6
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millions
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million
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 tourists in 1989,
then
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 it showed a high rise to just under 10
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millions
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million
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. In
2004
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2004,
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 the numbers
decline
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declined
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 to just above 7.5
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millions
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million
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. In 1989, the
Uk
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UK
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 received about 5
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millions
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million
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 outsiders
came
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who came
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 for commercial
aims
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purposes
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,
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.
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This
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These
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 numbers
appeared
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apply
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fluctuated
rates
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apply
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until the end of
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the terms
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terms
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term
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,
it reached
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reaching
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 about 8
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millions
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million
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. In
term
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terms
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 of visiting relatives, the hosts in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
welcome
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welcomed
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to
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apply
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about 4
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millions
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million
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 of their
friend
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friends
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 and relatives in 1989,
there
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and there
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were
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was
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rapid
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a rapid
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 growth
of
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in
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 numbers until
touched
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they reached
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 approximately 8
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millions
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million
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 between 2004 and 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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