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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some individuals consider that professionals should
have
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apply
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work
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 in
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country
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the country
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that
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where
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 they had
training
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their training
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.
However
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, others believe they should have a choice to choose the
country
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that
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where
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 they want to
work
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. Some
people
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 can apply to the
work
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 they wish,even if it
in
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is in
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 another
country
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. If they don't have the opportunity to
work
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at
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in
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 their home
country
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,they can choose to
work
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 in different countries.
For example
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, not every
country
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 has
a
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an
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 enormous monopoly
companies
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company
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 which can provide
a
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apply
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numerous
of
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apply
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workplaces.
Moreover
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,
this
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 could be
incredible
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an incredible
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 way to deal with unemployment.After all,individuals could gain the experience and knowledge from
developing
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a developing
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 company,and could return
to
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apply
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home and improve
thier
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their
country
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.
On the other hand
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,
government
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the government
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 should provide young professionals with workplaces in their
country
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.It would be beneficial for society to have a significant number of workers
that
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who
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 could replace each other. Especially doctors, in
urgent
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an urgent
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situation
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situation,
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 they are essential
people
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 in every
country
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.Who will save
people
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's
life
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lives
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 if everybody
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work
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works
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 in developing countries?Exactly, and it regards every professional who
want
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wants
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 to be helpful and support
to
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apply
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improving their
country
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. From my perspective,
evey
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every
 individual
have
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has
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a
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the
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 possibility and all rights to decide in which path of their life they want to choose.Whatever
if
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, if
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 it
is
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is,
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 stay at home
country
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 with their families and friends
or
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, or
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 take a risk, and try to have an opportunity to move
different
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to different
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 countries and gain international experience.
Finally
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, society or the government couldn't affect
on
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apply
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people
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's
choise
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choices
 if they couldn't provide a magnificent environment for personal growth.

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structure
Your answer covers both sides, but the ideas are not clear or full. Plan the essay with one idea per paragraph and give more detail.
structure
Make a strong intro and a short closing. Say the topic, the two views, and your own view in a clear way.
examples
Give more real life examples and explain how the idea helps or hurts people.
language
Fix grammar and spell some words. Use short sentences and clear marks.
content
The essay shows the writer does answer the task by giving a view.
position
The writer gives a clear personal view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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