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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

Water
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 is an essential for entail living things on Earth, especially clean
water
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, a fundamental necessity for human survival and well-being. Some
people
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 argued that it should be provided freely to all households. I firmly disagree with that statement;
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, we should charge an appropriate fee.
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, providing
water
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 free of charge would be economically unsustainable for governments and could lead to severe resource depletion.
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 is because the complex processes of
water
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 purification, distribution, and the ongoing maintenance of extensive infrastructure networks demand substantial financial investment.
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, without a revenue stream from user fees,
water
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 utility companies might struggle to maintain high standards of purification and infrastructure upkeep.
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 could compromise
water
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 quality and reliability, causing significant public health risks, especially in densely populated urban areas.
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, when a resource is perceived as free, there is a natural tendency for
people
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 to undervalue it and consume it without restraint.
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 could lead to widespread overconsumption and wastage.
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, there is plenty of
water
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 for daily life,
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 as cleaning clothes, cooking, and showering. If the community does not need to pay for these expenses, it may lead to the waste of
water
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 resources.
People
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's awareness of protecting
water
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 resources may decrease directly.
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, providing
water
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 free of charge may not only lead to wasteful
water
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 usage on the production line but
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 reduce the awareness of
water
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 treatment among the factories. In conclusion, it is essential to raise
people
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's awareness of protecting
water
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 resources to avoid wasting them. I believe that charging for
water
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 is an essential way to promote
water
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 conservation. Concurrently, measures should be adopted to guarantee that vulnerable groups maintain access to
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 essential resource without undue financial burden.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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