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Some people decided to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

It is becoming increasingly common for
people
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to begin
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 their own
business
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 without any working experience in a
company
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.
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 there are many
people
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 who set up their
business
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 without working for other companies , but to achieve success in their
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.I discuss the side of pros and cons
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 my conclusion. There are two main drawbacks to
people
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 who start their own
business
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. The one main problem is to face a crisis
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therefore
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, unless the
company
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income
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has income
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, the
company
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 does not become wealthy.
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,it can lose a lot of
money
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. The second main issue is that citizens must take full responsibility for mistakes.
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, if the creator of the
company
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 makes one mistake, it impacts the
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's income. A major benefit of
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 is that it makes plenty of
money
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 if you know how to start your own
business
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.
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, many
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 understand how to manage their
company
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as well as
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 their employees.
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, it takes a lot of risks and responsibilities ,
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, how to teach them the discipline of the work.
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, a person who sets up his first
business
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 should have good communication skills , and
it
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also
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 encourages
people
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 to work
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team.
To sum up
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, I believe that the advantages of setting up the
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 are to make more
money
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 and reputation.
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, someone does not want to take risks because they may lose their
money
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. I recommend taking the risk and starting your own
business
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 maybe
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you
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 will achieve success and bring wealth.

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structure
Plan your answer in three parts: an intro, a body with pros and cons, and a clear end that shows your view.
content
You show a hope to give both good and bad sides.
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